The word I would use to describe the diction of this story is usage. The words the author uses aids in the characterization and the tone of this work. It sets a dark, gloomy setting. These words also provide good imagery, and Personally, I can create this setting in my mind. The street, the weather, and the kids, I can picture this with no problems. The last sentence kind of threw out that dark mood, and provides us with the narrator’s change of mood from dark to light.
The last sentences of this passage throw me off. He uses the words dark and brown-clad figure and it gives me this eerie feeling that something bad is going to happen. Looking past these words, you remember that the narrator is admiring this wonderful woman that he is border-line obsessed with. So it’s not a dark situation, but rather an enlightening one for the narrator because he is trying to win over this woman.
The first paragraph is a little vague. (And I guess I'm unclear about "usage" also. I remember it was in the notes but I'm not sure how/why you are using it in this way.) You need to provide specific words or phrases from the text itself. Any close reading of a text is looking at the words and phrases, and if you don't specifically refer to words or phrases in the text, you can't effectively do a close reading.
ReplyDeleteYour second paragraph is a little better. You do refer to specific words (make sure to put quotation marks around them), and you explain your interpretation of them, but you need to add more to your analysis.